I am thankful for lots of things, like going to town hanging out with my friends and waking up in the morning to go to school. However, I am most thankful for my family because they are there for me and sometimes we get along. The way they show that they care is when they give me a presents even though it costs a little bit of money.
They do lots of things for me when I ask them to do it. I would do the same thing for them. They go to all of my games.
I am so proud of my family. I’m proud of them because they’re nice to me. I am thankful for my brother Danny because he likes to help my dad on trucks. Also, I am thankful for my dad because he brings me to school everyday, even through lots of blizzards, and floods. He also supports me with food, shelter, and water.
My family is always there for me, and when I need them. The time when I need them is when I get hurt or when I get sick. They are always there for me no matter what happens to me, especially when I need someone to talk to. They are the only ones there when I need them through hard times.
I love them so much for being all of these things to me, and they love me for being there for them. My family and I are really close, just like I am with my friends. Sometimes my family and I get along, and sometimes we don’t. Sometimes we play games because it always makes us happy. When we don’t get along is when my dad is drinking or one of my brothers or my sisters is having a bad day or evening.
Roland
Really good!!!!!!! But to redundant. I think you can add more stuff on paragraph 3. Goooood topic sentences on paragraph 1. Awesome job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!~ Your cousin Gage
I love how you talked about something that happens in everyday life. When you talked about your family, that made me think about how much time you spend with them. You need to work on not being redundant and saying “I” too much.